essay#2 draft peer review

Writer’s Name: alejandro irusta         
Paper Title: Chairo Paceño
Date: April 6, 2011
Editor’s Name: alejandro irusta

Peer Review Worksheet

1. Introduction: How does the first paragraph introduce both the paper’s topic and the writer’s approach or general conclusion? Is the first sentence attention-getting and relevant to the topic?

-explained  on how the plate was changed in ingredients and process..Conclusion re-stated the thesis and the explained the paragraphs main ideas.

2.                   What can you identify as a thesis statement? (Re-write it below) Suggest, if possible, a way to improve the introduction or thesis statement.

-       “as the years gone by the dish chairo paceño was changed in how it was cooked,produced and eaten.” Explain more on its health.

3.                   Structure: Can you identify the organization of the paper from the main idea of each paragraph? What are the main concepts explored in the paper? Does each paragraph make a relevant point that is distinct from what has already been covered? What are the main conclusions?

-       The organization was well structured . some paragraphs had their main ideas. And everything that was explained on the introduction was relevant to each paragraph.

4.                   Clarity/Style: Did you find distracting grammar, punctuation, spelling, or word usage problems? Identify any patterns or themes you detect. Is the tone of the essay formal? If you find awkward sentences, try to explain why they don’t make sense to you.

-       Many grammar mistakes. Some sentences were run-ons . many sentences are awkward.

5.                   Resources: Does the author clearly identify his/her sources? Is proper in-text and reference format used?

-       Cited a sentence well. Explained were every source and information came from.

6.                   What is/are the paper’s greatest strength(s)? Explain.

-its organization and sources. Everything was explained well in to paper just needs grammar help.